Comments on: Day 10 of 48 http://spaceagewasteland.com/day-10-of-48/ technology where little exists... hacking the simple life Sun, 14 Mar 2010 09:56:00 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.1.2 By: Sean http://spaceagewasteland.com/day-10-of-48/#comment-384 Sean Tue, 01 Nov 2005 19:18:43 +0000 http://spaceagewasteland.com/day-10-of-48/#comment-384 a few comments (for what they're worth): + the opening 'years of experience' litany leaves me pretty cold. are you married to that? + under you qualifications section, i would change it to 'experience' or something like that and use stronger verbs. 'competent' is pretty blase. so, for example, for that first bullet i'd say 'planned and led...' seems stronger to me. + if you want to leave the 'qualifications', i'd still use strong verbs, eg: 'I lead and accompany ensembles on both piano and guitar' or something like that. + i've got more stuff in this vein, if you find it helpful... + the musical experience in churches seems like a rehash or stuff above, just with specific congregations. maybe just list the churches where you've played...? a few comments (for what they’re worth):

+ the opening ‘years of experience’ litany leaves me pretty cold. are you married to that?
+ under you qualifications section, i would change it to ‘experience’ or something like that and use stronger verbs. ‘competent’ is pretty blase. so, for example, for that first bullet i’d say ‘planned and led…’ seems stronger to me.
+ if you want to leave the ‘qualifications’, i’d still use strong verbs, eg: ‘I lead and accompany ensembles on both piano and guitar’ or something like that.
+ i’ve got more stuff in this vein, if you find it helpful…
+ the musical experience in churches seems like a rehash or stuff above, just with specific congregations. maybe just list the churches where you’ve played…?

]]> By: JV http://spaceagewasteland.com/day-10-of-48/#comment-385 JV Wed, 02 Nov 2005 04:26:35 +0000 http://spaceagewasteland.com/day-10-of-48/#comment-385 I'm not a fan of the typical resume partial sentence structure, such as the following: "Adequately experienced in software development using buzzwords and related activities including the shaving of yaks" I think it's artificial and incomprehensible. My brain shuts down when I try to read that sort of thing. The relevant stuff is buried in the connective tissue. (Not your fault; it's probably exactly what you were taught.) It's probably less than PC, but I'd be more at ease saying: Strengths: C# Rails OSX Technical Writing and save the longer descriptive sentences for the jobs I worked at: "Developed a local interest blogazine using WordPress, Flash and a few friends. Launched in 1 week. Made $1M on AdSense in a month." Just MHO as a writer/reader (not as a career counselor). I’m not a fan of the typical resume partial sentence structure, such as the following:

“Adequately experienced in software development using buzzwords and related activities including the shaving of yaks”

I think it’s artificial and incomprehensible. My brain shuts down when I try to read that sort of thing. The relevant stuff is buried in the connective tissue. (Not your fault; it’s probably exactly what you were taught.) It’s probably less than PC, but I’d be more at ease saying:

Strengths:
C#
Rails
OSX
Technical Writing

and save the longer descriptive sentences for the jobs I worked at:

“Developed a local interest blogazine using WordPress, Flash and a few friends. Launched in 1 week. Made $1M on AdSense in a month.”

Just MHO as a writer/reader (not as a career counselor).

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